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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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It is undeniable that studying abroad has more important for many
students
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, nowadays due to they have more opportunities rather than in the past that the
students
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 were often learned in the university where are setting in only their own country after they finished their high school. From my point of view, education in
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 countries can offer advantages and disadvantages for everyone in society. In the following paragraph, the reasons to support my opinion will be outlined in the detail. On the one hand, one of the positive impacts of studying abroad is that the
students
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 can gain more experience and knowledge.
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, they can learn and exchange new cultures
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 as types of food,
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, they can improve
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 language skill.
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, many pupils can learn
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important skills, like survival skills, from new environments without their parents, and they can make new friends and new connections who are different languages and cultures.
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, many people argue that education in
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 lands can offer more negative impacts.
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, it is often using a lot of money because each area has
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 minimum wage.
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, some pupils who stay in a poor country cannot access
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studying abroad.
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, it can cause culture shock situations for someone, like many Thai
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 are often greeting with a salutation, while the international pupils are often greeting with a hug and a kiss which may cause uncomfortable for some persons. In conclusion, I strongly believe that learning in oversea areas can offer advantage and disadvantage due to all of
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 effects can be useful to them in the future, like doing business and choosing their career, but it can
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 lead to
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 of discomfort for somebody.
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, it is recommended that the strengths and the weaknesses of studying abroad depend on
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 of each person.
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