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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since the internet has widely replaced their function. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #money #internet #function
These days, all information,
books
, and published papers can be easily accessed by searching from the internet.
As a result
,
libraries
 where are the predominant place that
people
 used to go for finding
books
 are undervalued compared to the past.
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 the controversial debate that should
government
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 spend the vast amount of budget to maintain them, or not? In my opinion, maintaining
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public
libraries
 is absolutely necessary because of numerous benefits including encouraging concentration and socialization for
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reader
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readers
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.
First
 of all, public
libraries
encorage
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encourage
 readers to have more concentration on their tasks due to its
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quiet
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quite
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 and suitable environment without any distraction. Obviously, from my experience, I can spend three consecutive hours reading the research papers without
lossing
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losing
loosing
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under stand
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 all the points. Comparably, if I read a book in my
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, I will sleep definitely after 15 minutes pass.
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, preserving
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 is indispensable for promoting willpower for reading among the
people
 like me. Public
libraries
 are not only
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invaluable places for storing informative
books
, but they are
also
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places where
people
 spend
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valuable moments together. Students always revise the lesson with their
friend
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 and
senior
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 at
libraries
 during the exam's week.
Moreover
, some
of
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teenagers
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 meet new friends, who have the same interest.
For example
, If you're
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enthusiastic
in
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 Dinosaur, you can meet
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people
 who like the story of Jurrasic Park, and eventually may end up
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 a couple in the future. For these reasons,
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 should provide
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financial support to conserve the library. In summary, I definitely dismiss the statement that the
libraries
is
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 useless.
Although
 the development of technology, the internet, has
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changes
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 the way of searching information and reading
books
, the
publich
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public
libraries
 are still needed to be maintained due to the
aformentioned
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aforementioned
 reasons.
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