Many doctors say that people in today's world do not do enough physical exercise. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions are there to this problem?

Reading
newspapers
is one of the most crucial parts of
people
’s lives. If a question about electronic
books
replacing normal
books
is addressed, it will be challenging for us to make a decision on the controversial issue. Some
people
are a firm
believer
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in online
books
thanks to free of charge. Others,
however
, have always shown intense devotion to printed
newspapers
due to becoming familiar.
This
essay agrees with reading online
news
better than traditional
news
and will discuss advantages because of promptly updating and
environment
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issues. The
first
and most obvious reason for
people
trending to use online
news
is
instantly
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news
updated. Compared to the traditional printed newspaper which used at least 1
days
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day
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for manufacturing and distributing, the online
news
just writes content in a blog and uploads
so
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it so
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it can minimize the time to publish. Due to the
covit
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covert
situation, there are many
people
suffering from
this
pandemic disease. The e-
news
can make
people
know where the cluster is, leading to avoiding the place which can mean that the number of patients might decrease from going to the risk place. Another advantage
from
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electric
books
is the decrease in environmental issues. According to a local university in Thailand, Thai
people
consume 2 million
newspapers
per day.
Consequently
, not only a lot of trees are cut for manufacturing but
also
the old newspaper creates many tons of trash per day, both problems caused by the environment
such
as global warming and solid waste.
Therefore
using online
newspapers
can reduce using paper and decline those issues. In conclusion, even though many
people
still use printed
books
. In my
opinion
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the online
news
is faster than printed
newspapers
and if online
books
can replace all the traditional paper, it will
also
reduce global warming as well.
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