The number of TV programs is growing day by day. Some people say that it is good as it gives people more choices, while others say it affects the quality of TV programs. Discuss both and give your opinion.

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the population
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is growing up there is no doubt demand
of
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for
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TV programs or
show
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shows
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is increasing.
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day by
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plenty of channels with
varities
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varieties
of shows are introducing. Some people believe that it is good so they can
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choose
their favourite series as others are
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the opposite
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.
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essay will analyse the good and bad sides of
this
and will give my personal views at the end.
First
of all, getting a choice to choose favourite
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programme
program
has
immenes
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immense
advantage in person's life.
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an individuals
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an individual
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can enhance knowledge by watching his/her preferable shows.
For instance
, a person who is
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interested
in
art
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can watch only an
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art-related
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programe
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programme
program
and could get the
oppourtunities
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opportunities
to learn related his/her area of
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interest
from different sources.
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, because of technology people can watch
same
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the same
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drama or movies in
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different languages which
boardcast
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broadcast
from different channels
as a result
they do not have to quit their movies just because of languages barriers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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