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In recent days, many nations have a few youngsters

whom

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read newspapers or tracing the new reports on television. The following paragraphs will discuss and give the solutions

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with, in

this

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days and age there is a

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young people who cares and read the

newspaper

or watching

news

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the news

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, and I think

this

happen

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because of the technology development which is beat the old fashion

way

by following the

news

and read it from

newspaper

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a newspaper

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or from

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these day

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this day

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following the

news

reports became

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apply

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easier than before.

Besides

, nowadays you can know about a lot of things

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with

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one click on social media,

for instance

, social platforms, Twitter and Facebook.

On the other hand

, the best

way

to tackle

this

issue which is a few of youngsters reading the

newspaper

or following

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is best solved by sending the

newspaper

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it into

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every home because I think they feel lazy to go outside into grocery or supermarket to buy it,

furthermore

to improve their reading skills by

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it in a fun

way

such

as make a challenge to search about the specific word or finding an interesting topic to talk about to give them the confidence while they talking about their ideas.

Moreover

, setting behind the

and make them suggest what the

news

will talk about and discuss it together to

development

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develop

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their thinking thoughts. What is more, assist them to improve their knowledge about world problems,

for example

, climate change and global warming. In conclusion, I would like to close

this

argument by assuring that every generation

have

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their

way

to get the

news

from by

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because it depends about the individual and people should respect

this

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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

Your opinion

Technology is being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

Many graduates want to start their first job in a big corporation. Many others prefer to work for a small company first. What are the different advantages in each decision?

Topic 3: Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

School teaching should focus on success on the workforce and less attention should be given to academic achievement , to what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many cities, an increasing number of people do not know their neighbours and the sense of community is lost. Discuss the causes and give measures to turn it around?