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Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Technology
 has become a ubiquitous part of society and it makes
people
 believe that
technology
 is responsible for making them more sociable. I completely disagree with
this
 view because I believe that being social does not mean acquainting / connecting with new
people
 and interacting on digital
media
; rather it is about maintaining personal interactions with the
people
 around.
To begin
 with,
technology
 has enabled most communities to live in a virtual
world
 wherein they only interact with virtual friends and followers. They do not care about the
people
 around them. They are in desperate need to amass more likes and shares on social
media
. Even when attending a family function or a meeting, the public is busy browsing their social
media
 accounts and
thus
 they fail to be attentive to the
people
 around them. They are so busy showing themselves off in the digital
world
 that they forget about the real
people
 near them. The advances in
technology
 have made
people
 show more interest in online life;
however
, it made them forget about face to face interaction. A recent study has shown that as youngsters spend more time on social
media
, they have become less sociable in real life. The vast majority of them do not even know who lives
next
 door but they have virtual friends on all continents. It is true that computers and mobile phones connect the universe and help
people
 to find friends across the
world
.
On the contrary
,
technology
 fails to connect real-life persons and as a
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result there is a decline in human values and interactions.
Technology
 makes
people
 fake; it does not show the real trait of a person.
For example
, before the invention of
technology
,
people
 shared happiness, pain, smiles and they extended their helping hands to their fellow humans. Nowadays they are portraying themselves to be socially active just for the sake of digital likes and shares. In conclusion,
technology
 fails to make man sociable in the real
world
. Being sociable lies in sharing a physical smile rather than a digital smiley.
Although
technology
 offers greater connectivity among
people
 worldwide, it is really making
people
 less sociable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social interaction
  • connect
  • communicate
  • video conferencing
  • stay in touch
  • online communities
  • forums
  • like-minded individuals
  • global communication
  • collaboration
  • access to information
  • knowledge
  • bridge the gap
  • social isolation
  • detachment
  • face-to-face communication
  • genuine human connection
  • maintain
  • real-life interactions
  • balance
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