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Buying products online is common nowadays, Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, many people
prefers
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 to shop online rather than going out
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shopping but there are many concerned individuals who feel that
offline
 shopping is much safer and enjoyable as compared to online. Others,
however
, believe that online shopping is a convenient and
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time saving
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 option. I completely agree with the latter statement and in
this
 essay, I will support my view with examples. One of the major drawbacks of online shopping is that
,
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 we can not trust the security services provided by
the
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online shopping platforms. As we all know that e-commerce websites can be easily get hacked by attackers.
For example
, when we install
such
 applications on our devices, we often save our debit/credit card
informations
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 and if the cyber security of that website is weak
then
 an attacker can easily obtain our financial details.
Moreover
, sometimes it becomes difficult to choose
right
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 size clothes and we end up getting
wrong
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 products. In
offline
 shopping, we can simply avoid
such
 situations and we get more variety of different options while shopping.
On the other hand
, we can not deny the advantages of online shopping. For online shopping, we do not have to travel and
instead
 of that we can save our time and utilize it for other tasks. In
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 recent survey, it has been proven that the number of online shoppers has increased rapidly. During
Covid19
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 pandemic, it was not possible for human
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beings
begins
 to do
offline
 shopping,
thus
 online shopping was the only option available.
Furthermore
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rural citizens choose online shopping due to
lack
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 of shopping centres and malls. They get wide options for purchasing any goods. In conclusion,
although
 there are good reasons why we should consider
offline
 shopping, I strongly think that online shopping is more profitable and a smart way of shopping.
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