There are many wild birds and animals living in the cities, and some people believe that these animals should be killed, while others think that they should be saved and protected. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are opposing views about protecting or killing wild
animals
and
birds
which lives or commute in the
cities
. As far as I am concerned, protecting
animals
, especially, wild ones will assist to secure the earth. According to one group’s view that advocates town’s wildlife killing, these kinds of mammals and woodsy fowls are dangerous for the people particularly the kids. They believe that
the
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wild
animals
attack every individual they see, especially, when they are starving.
Moreover
, they believe that these types of huge mammals and wild
birds
are harmful to
cities
’ facilities
such
as dumpsters, plants in the yards and hedges.
For example
, once they are hungry, they watch at any dumpster as a buffet and damage them to feed themselves.
However
, I share the opinion which thinks these kinds of creatures should be protected. According to
this
perspective, the
animals
and the
birds
possess priority to live in the region due to they are living there far before human
being
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started to build their
cities
.
Thus
, we must respect
to
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their lives and try to have a peaceful life beside them. To achieve
this
goal, there are some provincial rules to protect wild
animals
and
birds
from human’s harassment and vice versa.
For instance
, there is a province’s ‘Bear Wise Rules’ in Ontario which following that will help us stay safe from the bears, and,
also
, not hurting them.
Furthermore
,
animals
’ conservation will, eventually, assist the earth protection. A case in point is, once there are wolves in a territory where
deer
live (as we know many kinds of
deer
live beside and even inside the Canadian
cities
), the number of
deer
are
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being remained stable via wolves feed
from
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some of them. So, the plants have an adequate condition to grow and remain because of
suitable
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feed volume of the
deer
;
therefore
, the land of that region have a fit environment which leads to appropriate weather for that neck of the woods. In conclusion, while, there are some dangers and detriments because of the wild
animals
and
birds
roaming in the
cities
, they have intense benefits for our life’s situation and the mother earth.
Therefore
, we all must do our best to make them safe.
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