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Nowadays it is common for people to get married and have children in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Do you agree or disagree that this trend will benefit society?

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In many parts of
world
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, being married after the
age
 of 27-28 and becoming parents only after matured
age
. In my opinion,
this
 way of living life will bring benefits to
society
such
 as less domestic violence, a bright future for the upcoming generation, and less population after some decades.
Further
, I will provide justifications for my standpoint. As
age
 grows, a person becomes more mature.
This
 maturity will surely bring qualities of peace and trust in the marriage. When a partner is matured enough, they will not indulge themselves in domestic violence for petty issues. They would resolve any conflicts with peace and harmony at their home. Having few cases of domestic violence can be considered as a benefit to
society
.
Additionally
, marriage partners will be financially stable when they are in their thirties. They can plan for better career options for their
children
such
 as going abroad for study, pursuing Medical or Engineering streams.
As a result
, the upcoming generation will bring prosperity and power to
society
.
For example
, the people of Kerala getting married only after having financial freedom for ages, and we can see the progress of their
children
. They are among the most influential people in the USA in Medicine and Engineering fields.
Furthermore
, partners of late marriages would not prefer to have more than two
children
 due to the possible
age
 issues during the upbringing of the
children
.
As a result
, there will be less population in
society
 after some decades.
This
 scenario can be considered as the paramount benefit for
society
. In conclusion, I
second
 my opinion of
society
 is getting benefited by late
age
 marriages because of aforementioned benefits.
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