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Nowadays it is common for people to get married and have children in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Do you agree or disagree that this trend will benefit society?

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In many parts of
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, being married after the
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 of 27-28 and becoming parents only after matured
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. In my opinion,
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 way of living life will bring benefits to
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 as less domestic violence, a bright future for the upcoming generation, and less population after some decades.
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, I will provide justifications for my standpoint. As
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 grows, a person becomes more mature.
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 maturity will surely bring qualities of peace and trust in the marriage. When a partner is matured enough, they will not indulge themselves in domestic violence for petty issues. They would resolve any conflicts with peace and harmony at their home. Having few cases of domestic violence can be considered as a benefit to
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, marriage partners will be financially stable when they are in their thirties. They can plan for better career options for their
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 as going abroad for study, pursuing Medical or Engineering streams.
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, the upcoming generation will bring prosperity and power to
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, the people of Kerala getting married only after having financial freedom for ages, and we can see the progress of their
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. They are among the most influential people in the USA in Medicine and Engineering fields.
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, partners of late marriages would not prefer to have more than two
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 due to the possible
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 issues during the upbringing of the
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, there will be less population in
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 after some decades.
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. In conclusion, I
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 is getting benefited by late
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 marriages because of aforementioned benefits.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic stability
  • financial security
  • mature decision making
  • life goals
  • child welfare
  • emotionally equipped
  • population growth control
  • resource management
  • environmental sustainability
  • changing social norms
  • traditional timelines
  • personal freedom
  • social diversity
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