Many people think that zoos, which keep wild animals in a man-made environment should no longer exist in the 21st century. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the current century, it is widely believed that zoos should be completely eradicated from society. I firmly agree with

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view and shall portray my thoughts with some supporting points in the following paragraphs.

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with, wildlife parks are distinctly different from the natural environment. Most significantly, these are confined areas in which these wild inhabitants are kept.

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, tigers are given

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10 metres walking space,

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, in their own natural environment they roam around for hundreds of kilometres.

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, these zoological institutions do not provide

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proper

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diet.

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, the food provided to them is less

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hygienic

and lacks essential proteins which

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vital for their survival.

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, recently in the

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it was shown that most of the

animals

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as giraffes, monkeys and cheetahs died in a zoological garden due to malnutrition.

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, it has been ubiquitously seen that visitors in national parks tease these caged

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. Due to

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, they sway from one corner of the cage to another, in turn, hurting themselves. As an example, in a recent

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it was shown that 80% of the families misbehave with the wild creatures locked up in a cage, which has a detrimental impact on these

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, the cross-breeding programmes conducted by the zoos have failed attempts.

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poses a threat to their existence and may

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cause their lineage to extinct. To illustrate, a renowned menagerie tried hybridizing a male lion and a female tiger to give birth to a liger.

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experiment turned out to be a disaster in which the test specimens cost their lives and both the

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were dead. To conclude, I would like to reiterate my opinion that the cruel activities practised by these zoos is unacceptable and with

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immediate action they should be totally abolished.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Ethical considerations
Wildlife conservation
Artificial habitats
Species preservation
Breeding programs
Animal welfare
Ecological awareness
Habitat destruction
Captive breeding
Educational outreach
Physical wellbeing
Psychological stress
Regulatory compliance
Domestication vs. wildness
Natural behavior
Economic viability
Tourist attractions
Cultural perspective
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