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Some people believe that life in a big city is difficult while others say that it is more convenient.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 many
people
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 believe that
life
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 in a metro
city
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 is a blessing, there are others who have a different point of view regarding
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. In my perception, it is a matter of choice.
To begin
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 with, many
people
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 assert that major developments are
city
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-centric, which makes living in a
city
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 more convenient. The government always looks after the basic amenities of
city
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 dwellers and they get better transportation, amusement facilities, water and electricity supply which unfortunately is not available in rural areas.
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,
cities
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 offer more job opportunities and earning bread and butter is easier in a developed
city
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. Not only do literates get better opportunities to work in multinational and big companies, but
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 many illiterate
people
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 work as security guards, car drivers, cooks and assistants in houses, shops and offices in a
city
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. Malls, PVR’s, supermarkets remain under one shelter where they can go on weekends for necessary purchases and entertainment.
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 but not least, in most of the villages, many students walk miles after miles on foot to go to schools, pupils in
cities
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 can save time and use more convenient transportation.
On the other hand
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, many
people
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 believe that urban
life
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 is complex.
People
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 do not have a strong social bond and remain busy in their own world, unlike a rural area.
People
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 have to work over 50 hours a week to bring food to their table and crimes are heinous in
cities
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. To conclude, I believe that
cities
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 have facilities that let us live a modern
life
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 but sometimes with the cost of our personal and social
life
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.
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,
this
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 is a choice we make either to live in a big
city
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 and enjoy modern facilities or live close to nature in a village where scarcity of modern amenities is obvious.
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