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An increasing number of developing countries are expanding their tourist industry today. Why do you think it is the case? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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The line charts illustrate the percentage of families that have domestic machines and the weekly average time spent on housework during the period between 1920 and 2020. Overall, it is readily apparent that the two charts display opposite trends: residents in
this
 country have more electrical appliances while they spend much less time on housework, like washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning. In 1920, only 20% and 24% of households had a washing machine and a refrigerator, while no family had a vacuum cleaner. From
this
 year, the percentage of families with relevant machines experienced a significant increase until 1960. The percentage of wash machine slightly fell from 60% in 1960 to 52% in 1980. By 2019, 100% of households have their own vacuum cleaners and refrigerators, and
this
 figure in the washing machine is just over 60%. Compare with the upward trend of appliances, the
hours
 spent on household sharply decreased from 50
hours
 per week in 1920 to 20
hours
 in 1960.
Then
this
 number kept felling to 10
hours
 in 2019.
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