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There seems to be an increasing number of serious crimes committed each year. While some think the best way is to use the death penalty as a deterrent, many people believe that other measures will be needed. Discuss both sides.

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In recent years, there has been a spike in the number of serious criminal offences. Some people argue that
death
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 sentence is an ideal method to deter crimes whereas some presume that other charges are more suitable.
This
 essay will elucidate both views objectively.
Death
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 penalty is appropriate for serious felonies for two reasons.
First
 of all, it is not only suitable
in
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for
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 eliminating
reoffenders
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offenders
, but it can
also
 discourage future criminals to commit
such
 crimes.
For example
, if there is a definite
death
 sentence for significant offences
such
 as murder, rape, and human trafficking, individuals might rethink before committing them.
Secondly
, justice must be given
for
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 victims who suffered and the families of those who lost their lives.
Hence
, it is imperative that those who commit inhumane and
unforgiveable
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unforgivable
 acts compensate for their mistakes with their lives.
On the other hand
, different charges could be imposed as an alternative to
death
 in certain cases. In spite of the magnitude of
crime
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,
first time
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 offenders or those who had to for valid reasons may be considered to be given a
second
 chance. Some examples of heavy charges include
lifetime
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 in prison or under-watch social services. In
this
 way, they can repay for their mistakes and be refrained from wrongdoing again. To conclude, it is apparent that
death
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 sentence is suitable for criminals of repeated serious offences,
however
, alternative measures can be imposed on some occasions. The key outcome is for the victims to get their rightful justice and the lawbreakers’ compensations for their acts.
Thus
, judgement fitting for each scenario must be made.
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