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Violence in society increases when more violence is shown on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?.

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In recent years, there is an ongoing debate whether
violence
 shown on
television
 increases brutality in the real world. In
this
 ,essay the argument will be carefully examined to support my own opinion. I tend to partially agree with the statement as I believe it does influence many people, especially the younger generations.
Firstly
, I would like to discuss the negativity which brings harm to the community by
movies
 that appear on
television
.
For instance
,
tamil
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Tamil
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movies
 have portrayed many negative roles in the cinema which has become a trend to the viewers.
In addition
, when their favourite stars or idols are playing certain characters.
For example
 scenes of actors carrying weapons. The followers tend to mimic the character that has been played by their idols.
Thus
this
 will indirectly increase
violence
 and affect younger generations' future. I believe the stars should avoid taking part in extreme violent scenes and the sensor board should give more strict guidelines on extreme violent scenes, it will be much more pleasant for viewers.
Secondly
, there are many good
movies
 being made which carry a plethora of great values. The tv programmes aren't an issue, it is the viewer's problem. I think
this
 kind of scenario can be avoided if you watch
television
 for entertainment purposes only.
However
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 it is our choice whether to watch what kind of
movies
 or shows. In conclusion , there are several pros and cons when it comes to
violence
 on
television
 which affects the growth of
violence
 growth in our community.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • media influence
  • desensitization
  • mimic
  • impressionable
  • copycat phenomenon
  • aggression
  • correlational
  • causal link
  • violent crime rates
  • educational role
  • glorification
  • cultural norms
  • social factors
  • community norms
  • regulatory measures
  • broadcasting restrictions
  • content rating systems
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