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Many people feel it is a waste of money to try to save endangered animal species, for example the tiger or the blue whale. To what extant do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is undeniable that saving endangered animal species, like the tiger and the blue whale at the present is using a lot of money.
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 situation can make many people feel it is a waste of money. From my point of view, I agree with
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 viewpoint for many reasons which will be outlined in the detail in the following paragraph. It is true to say that preventing endangered
animals
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 from extinction must use a lot of money, but people will gain many advantages from saving these
animals
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.
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, these kinds of
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, like the tiger, are the keystone species of the food chain system because if the forests do not have these
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, it will cause an ecological imbalance.
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, the forest
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 has only the prey, no predators,
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.
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, the extinction of these
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 can reduce the biodiversity in the
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, and it can increase some
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, like the deer and the rabbit, in the ecosystem. While some plants will decrease, the demand for herbivores has increased.
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, the extinction of these types of
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 can reduce the speciation issues in the
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.
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, the ligers are born from the mating of
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lions and tigers. In that case, it can decrease many scientists to study with the new evolution.
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, one of the important things
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 these
animals
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 is that the genetic can identify evolution knowledge or information to many researchers to create new innovations from
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the DNA
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 of these
animals
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 to use in the future. In conclusion, I strongly disagree with
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 statement because
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animals
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 are an important thing for the ecosystem in the globe, and the existence of these
animals
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 can specify the abundance of the
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.
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, it is recommended that both government and individuals should take serious action on
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 problem
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 as fund establishment.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • intrinsic value
  • existential threat
  • ecosystem
  • conservation
  • economic benefits
  • funding allocation
  • competing needs
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