In some countries, the government pays unemployed people on a weekly basis. How this would impact people as well as government? Do you agree or disagree with that?

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In recent years, there

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an ongoing debate

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about whether

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the

government

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should or should not support unemployed

people

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. In

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essay, it will be carefully examined to support my opinion. I tend to disagree with those who are privileged to receive help from the

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authorities.

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, in today’s world of high technology. With the presence of social media, the opportunity for any individual to earn is widely open. In

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case, I would certainly disagree with the

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's policy to help those

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. The priority should be given to disabled

people

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or retired folks. More funds to those who are in need.

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will help them to live a decent

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without any worries.

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privilege is forming laziness among younger generations for not putting any effort

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into getting

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a job.

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, students may not

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their higher education as the future has been secured

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apply

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will influence

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to spend money freely as it

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for free. It will indirectly

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growth

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the growth

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of the nation. Many sectors will be affected, mainly

education

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the education

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industries. It will

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a negative impact on the economy which will degrade the progress of the nation. In conclusion, there are more negative impacts on the growth of the country and the

people

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if the

government

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continues paying the unemployed. Younger generations are the backbone of the country's future.

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of funding the unemployed, the

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should give more job opportunities for all graduates and support to the youth of the nation.

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Provide a clear stance on the topic and develop it throughout the essay

coherence and cohesion

Connect ideas more logically and provide a clearer progression of arguments

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Topic Vocabulary:

unemployment benefits
financial support
basic standard of living
essential needs
economic stability
job seeking
government expenditure
reallocation of funds
dependency culture
consumer spending
income inequality
safety net
public resources
workforce productivity
substantial resources
social equity

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