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in some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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In some societies around the world,
children
 are broadly convinced that they can attain all of their objectives and overcome any hurdle by dint of striving. In fact, there is a high likelihood of those
children
 having a successful professional life;
however
, it would
also
 place a strain on them, with
children
’s mental well-being being adversely affected. Teaching
children
 the value of industriousness is worthwhile. When
children
 endeavour and achieve what they have worked for, it gives them a sense of accomplishment. Not only does
this
 boost their self-confidence, but it
also
 increases their self-esteem. Another positive aspect is that
this
 can foster a variety of skills needed for their future lives, for ,instance perseverance, with
children
 growing into well-rounded, tenacious adults. They,
moreover
, learn about their abilities and limitations, thereby expanding their comfort zones. Ergo, only by motivating
children
 to strive can they thrive. Notwithstanding the aforementioned profoundly positive implications, there are some compelling reasons why it would be prejudicial to
children
 mental health. One of the underlying problems with instilling
this
 notion into them is a sense of frustration. By way of example,
children
 may set an unrealistic goal of being rich at the age of 15, and if they cannot reach
this
 when they reach that age, they would be disappointed. As they grow older, they become increasingly disillusioned. Another drawback is that they would hold high-performance expectations for themselves, and stringently evaluate their performances. They might,
therefore
, be at risk of suffering from higher levels of burnout, depression, and stress in both the long- and short-term. In conclusion, I take the view that
although
 spurring them to be industrious is highly beneficial to their career prospects, it is a fallacy that everything they have a desire for is attainable, so they should
also
 be taught that there are some constraints in the real world, along with the importance of hard work;
otherwise
,
this
 nurture would impose a burden on them, with
children
 suffering from anxiety.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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