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You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider.

#course #country #accommodation #provider
Dear Osama, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. We have been friends
from
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since
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 middle school but somehow lost touch after we joined the university. But I remember
you
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your
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 passion
in
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for
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 painting and
photography
. I am writing
this
 letter to tell you that I have won a prize in a
photography
 contest held by " the art organization ". They have organized many events to
honor
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 the winners. I would like you to be there with me since you are the one who motivated me in
photography
. I have been on a trip to
abha
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last
 summer and I went ta a place called " The High City " where you can see
the
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nature from
a
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high ground. I took some photos
in
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on
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 my phone. When " The Art " announced a
photography
 contest, I sent these pictures and they selected me as a winner. The organization called me
last
 week and told me about the prize. It is the new model camera of canon brand. I am so excited. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Best regards, Ziyad
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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