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Some people believe that bicycle are the best mode of transport in the cities, while others disagree. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both views and give your own opinion.

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Certain individuals think that cycling is the best way of transport, while others think that it is not the greatest choice. In my opinion,
although
 riding a bicycle may be inconvenient, I believe that it benefits both environment and
people
's health. Commuting to certain places, using
this
 vehicle,
may be
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 inconvenient in some situations. Riding a bike on the roads in the city which has an important number of cars and amount of air pollutants, or cycling for 2 hours to the workplace cause riders to feel more exhausted rather than satisfied.
Furthermore
, some
people
 need to find an extra space to park their bikes which several places do not provide. In Bangkok,
people
 are unlikely to use a bicycle for transportation as there is a considerable amount of PM 2.5 in the city and parking areas for bikes are unavailable.
However
,
this
 method creates a better environment and
people
's healthy habits. Bicycles emit 0 amount of carbon dioxide which is harmful to nature, so the more riders, the more healthy environment in the city. Bicycles
also
 require human's consistent power to move which will strengthen their body and muscles.
For instance
, Japanese
people
 tend to transport by personal bicycle and
this
 reduces Co2 emissions as well as better citizen's health in Japan. In conclusion, though it would be difficult for some individuals, riding a bike in daily life is friendly to nature and
body
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. I strongly consider
this
 method as the best mode of transport. At the end of the day,
people
 should ride a bike as long as it does not cause drawbacks to themselves.
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