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You feel the evening programs on a local television station are uninteresting. Write a letter to the manager of the television station. In your letter * explain why you do not like the current programs * describe what kind of programs you would like to see instead * explain why these programs would be better

#programs #television #station #manager
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to give you information about television programs at the company. Currently, I am watching your channel why is
this
 channel not good again like yesterday
.
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 Hopefully, you can change your
program
 views which would be better. Recently, your
program
 was not good for education again and endangered for children please take down your content from your platform. You must evaluate all your employers.
However
, all people need to watch video education which can increase their knowledge of children. I want your
program
 to show no violence in the video and give information
such
 as motivation and action.
On the other hand
, people need movies of good quality and good for studying. I suggest for your programs if you wanna good get retting you must give film censored before you up at your
program
. I hope
this
 letter can repair and consideration your company and I can not wait for your reply for a long time. Thank you very much for your attention. Faithfully Ansory
Submitted by patricius.yohanes on

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task achievement
Provide specific examples of why the current programs are uninteresting and suggest particular types of programs you'd prefer.
coherence cohesion
Make smoother transitions between paragraphs to improve the flow of your writing.
coherence cohesion
Avoid repetitive phrases and ensure you present one clear idea per paragraph to enhance readability.
task achievement
The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone throughout.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and correctly formatted.
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