Some people believe that governments should have access to people’s mobile phone call records and messages for safety reasons. Others believe that this information is private and should not be available without permission. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

To certain
people
claim that all call records and messages of mobile phones should
be reach
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by
governments
for national security.
However
, those who disagree said it is private
information
and
governments
have not rights to
access
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any permission.
This
essay will discuss both sides as well as my point of view. Many
people
believe that
governments
could
access
to
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this
information
for several reasons.
First
of all, they think it might reduce
a
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crime rate in societies. To explain,
governments
can prevent crimes before taking place by monitoring and detecting cell phone activities.
Also
,
this
information
improve
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a
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national security. A good example is a terrorist. If
governments
can
access
all data, many tragedies would not occur in the world.
On the other hand
, some
people
think
governments
should not do so. Without any permission of
people
,
governments
cannot
access
it even for safety reasons.
This
is because both calling records and messages
in
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people
's
phone
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phones
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are private
information
. It is covered by
a
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civil
right
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rights
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law.
As a result
, before obtaining and using private
information
such
like
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these records,
governments
have to receive all
people
's consent. In conclusion, it cannot be denied that
governments
have to
access
personal
information
for preventing crimes and terrorists.
Nevertheless
, I strongly believe that
this
is an invasion of privacy. There are a number of alternative ways to enhance a
safety
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environment for societies
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instance,
increaseing
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increasing
more
police men
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policemen
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and improving
population
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the population
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database. I believe it is better than invading personal privacy.
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