Some people believe that governments should have access to people’s mobile phone call records and messages for safety reasons. Others believe that this information is private and should not be available without permission. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
To certain
people
claim that all call records and messages of mobile phones should be reach
by Change the verb form
be reached
be reaching
governments
for national security. However
, those who disagree said it is private information
and governments
have not rights to access
with
any permission. Correct pronoun usage
it with
This
essay will discuss both sides as well as my point of view.
Many people
believe that governments
could access
to
Change preposition
apply
this
information
for several reasons. First
of all, they think it might reduce a
crime rate in societies. To explain, Correct article usage
the
governments
can prevent crimes before taking place by monitoring and detecting cell phone activities. Also
, this
information
improve
Change the verb form
improves
a
national security. A good example is a terrorist. If Remove the article
apply
governments
can access
all data, many tragedies would not occur in the world.
On the other hand
, some people
think governments
should not do so. Without any permission of people
, governments
cannot access
it even for safety reasons. This
is because both calling records and messages in
Change preposition
on
people
's phone
are private Fix the agreement mistake
phones
information
. It is covered by a
civil Correct article usage
apply
right
law. Fix the agreement mistake
rights
As a result
, before obtaining and using private information
such
like
these records, Change preposition
as
governments
have to receive all people
's consent.
In conclusion, it cannot be denied that governments
have to access
personal information
for preventing crimes and terrorists. Nevertheless
, I strongly believe that this
is an invasion of privacy. There are a number of alternative ways to enhance a safety
environment for societies Replace the word
safe
For
instance, Add the comma(s)
,For
increaseing
more Correct your spelling
increasing
police men
and improving Correct your spelling
policemen
population
database. I believe it is better than invading personal privacy.Correct article usage
the population
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