Some people claim that many things that children are taught at school are a waste of time. Other people argue that everything that children study at school is useful at sometime. Discuss the both views and give your opinion.

In recent years
aroud
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around
the
world
childeren
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children
education
sytem
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system
slowly moving towards home
instead
of schools. There was big debate towards formal
education
system
that young generation learning skills are completely no useful to leads their
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lives
life
lifes
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.
Majority
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group of society oppose
this
statement due to fact that
formal
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the formal
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education
system
is
helpfull
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helpful
to handle the technicalities and behaviour
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challenges
in
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our
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out side
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outside
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world
. In my
view
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the formal
education
system
help
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a lot in day to day life activities in future. The below discussion going to give both sides with supporting
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.
Firstly
, the basic learning skills of kids start from their parents up to
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certain
certaine
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age limit. The
next
step of learning start from our
education
system
. The kids are able to get
chance
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a chance
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in
this
system
to meet different people with various cultures and it will help them to know their life
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style
and behaviour. The
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classroom
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class room
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teaching will help them to
expierence
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experience
partical
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practical
knowledge and the vast experience teachers help to sort out their set of questions.
This
system
will help a lot for their ages to solve the problems in different techniques. It will help in their carrier to solve those
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challenges
. For
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, in
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a software professional if are
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to work for
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health
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care
system
the
basis
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education
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your
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early age will help to understand the basic nature of work.
However
, there are
challanges
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challenges
in
this
education
system
with
group
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a group
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of people in your primary
education
system
. It is difficult to focus on individual needs and
also
there is a scope that other people
culture
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may attract to deviate focus towards the other activities rather than
education
. As an
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if you didn't choose
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person friendship
it
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will lead the kid towards the
veired
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desired
behaviour activities like drug addicts. The home school
system
can avoid
this
situation and the
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teenager
always
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under
survivlence
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surveillance
of parents. The student will get will focus as an individual towards their academic needs. But, it will
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these kids nothing to know about
outside
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world
. In conclusion,
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both
education
system
have
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their
there
own positives and negatives.
However
, the schooling
education
system
will help a lot for
young
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the young
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generation to explore
outside
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the outside
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world
and learn new techniques toward their professional carrier. The slight changes in
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the current
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education
system
can build
better
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a better
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society
of
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next
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generatation
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generation
generations
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