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The range of technology available to people is increasing the gap between the rich and the poor. Others think it has an opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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Thanks to technological advancements, a
business
 can be expanded across a global level with ease. While some
people
 believe that the range of online platforms make the wealthy richer and keep the poor still below the poverty line,
however
, I, believe that it has a completely reversed effect as multiple opportunities are available with the free
technology
.
Firstly
, some
people
 argue that advanced
technology
 gives the opportunity to grow a
business
 which makes
people
 rich outside the existing location. Many of these facilities are expensive and poor individuals can not afford them
moreover
, low-class human beings can not purchase expensive gadgets which allow them to explore online content creation zone. To illustrate, many local businesses don't have enough budget for Amazon or Flipkart advertisement or subscription due to that they keep their profit at low whereas a wealthy shop opts for
this
 option and get more revenue in return.
As a result
, the gap between the rich and poor keep growing as an enormous amount of choices are absent.
On the other hand
, I believe that plenty of e-commerce sites are giving free service or at a very minimal charge. Open-source materials and platforms are existing benefits of advanced
technology
. If a person has internet service on their smartphone, they can learn anything and put their
business
 upfront with free content which increases their chance to become prosperous.
For example
, many native companies have hosted and created their online websites with cost-effective domains which cost only 100 Rupees in India. In my opinion, anybody can earn a large amount, if they have knowledge of a certain
business
 or tool. To get knowledge multiple frees of cost online contents are available which can be accessed from anywhere anytime.
Thus
, upgraded
technology
 is a tool to cover the pay gap between upper and middle-class
people
. To conclude,
although
 some range of upgraded gadgets are costly and can not fit middle-class
people
's pocket, the amount of free service available with the technological boost is very beneficial for common
people
 to learn or do businesses in any field.
Therefore
,on balance, I think that the narrow separation between rich and poor has been amended because of the online platforms.
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