Too much emphasis is given for the education of students. More government money should be spent on free time activities for young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The government spends a lot of financial resources on the educational side of scholars,

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it is considered that the after-school and spare time

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should gain the most financial attention of the government. High-quality education should be always examined

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investing money in

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and scholars, which can turn

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into better specialists, and better specialists have a bigger impact on the world and society,

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attending better after-school

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, a bigger desire to continue to educate awakens learners. On the one hand, good education for young people can be provided by just professional teachers with a lot of useful knowledge and doesn't have to require any extra facilities

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educating, like the building design, minibars or coffee machines as it

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, a lot of financial resources can be saved and spent on relaxational programs as restrooms, different kinds of sports or even a gym if it can be afforded. More contrarily, studying must be the number one priority for

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as it significantly affects building their future life,

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, there is almost no need for massively considering after-school

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at all, as they can cause a negative impact on the productivity of the pupils.

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the educational process,

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students

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will wish to attend the

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, not being concentrated on the current schooling process.

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, I totally disagree with the statement that more money should be spent on spare time

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. I solidly believe, that

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the government budget must competently be divided for each industry, education should always be the number one priority for scholars.