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Some people say that it is a waste of time to focus on future and important to focus on present. To what extent do u agree or disagree?

#people #waste #time #focus #future
Nowadays,
people
 have a different idea about which they have to
focus
 on
future
 or present. In my opinion, I believe that the
future
 will be great if I do it best every day. So I agree that it is important to
focus
 on what you do now more than focusing on what you will be in the
future
.
First
 of all, in the present, Technology
such
 as artificial intelligence(AI) has developed a lot from in the past, which will be used
instead
 in some human works.
Therefore
,
people
 have to try hard if they want to get their job in the present.
Moreover
,
people
 did not have the
time
 to
focus
 on what will happen in the
future
 because the competition in the present is very high, everyone has to
focus
 on their works and make them as good and fast as they can.
On the other hand
,
people
 who are thinking about what will occur in the
future
 or thinking I will be rich by not doing anything changed from their normal might have lost their opportunity and
time
 to get the result that they want to be. Due to the
time
 never wait for anyone, my father told me " One day you will leave
this
 world behind, so live a life you will remember and do it best that you did not regret after ". to conclude, I agree that focusing on the
future
 will waste the
time
, I think it important to
focus
 on what you do in the present, which will lead to what will happen in your
future
. So do not think too much but do it a lot.
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