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In the future, it may be scientifically possible for people to live for 150 years. This could be good for individuals but it may have negative consequences for society. What are the benefits and risks of people living to 150

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Nowadays, technological advancement has been progressively developing and in the
future
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 it is obvious that the field of science could be ultimately improved.
Therefore
, the possibility that humans can live for 150 years might be true in the near future.
However
, a long life might cause both advantages and disadvantages to
society
. In today's world, we are all facing the ageing
society
 issue that the population of elder
people
 is higher than the population of younger
people
. The consequence of
this
 issue is unbalancing
support
 for the young and old generations. If there are too many old populations in the
society
, the government has to take care of elder
society
instead
 of supporting younger
people
 for becoming a new generation who will drive the country.
Moreover
, if a human's life span is longer than usual, obviously the ageing
society
 will increase rapidly and the
society
 won't be able to manage to
support
 both generations.
On the other hand
, the existence of old
people
 is
also
 important to the community. Our traditions and customs are conserved and transferred by elders.
Therefore
, the significant role of the senior is to maintain and represent our wisdom. To
support
this
 statement, in Japan, there are many senior citizens and they are
also
 encountering ageing
society
 issues, but some of the elders in their country are receptionists who
support
 the national tourist attractions. These groups of
people
 have represented Japanese culture and tradition, and
this
 is the reason why Japanese tradition is unique and hard to be influenced by others.
Therefore
, the longer human's life spine might have a great benefit on conserving and protecting
society
's norms. In conclusion, in the near future
people
 might be able to live for 150 years.
This
 could affect the balancing of age range population in the
society
 and the younger generation wouldn't get sufficient
support
.
However
, the elders
also
 distribute knowledge and wisdom to
society
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • longevity
  • life expectancy
  • scientific advancements
  • experience
  • personal goals
  • loved ones
  • knowledge
  • wisdom
  • contributions
  • advancements
  • fear of death
  • appreciation for life
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