Some students take a year off between school and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

The modern
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technology has witnessed dramatic changes over the
last
few decades. Generally, it is becoming hard to cope up with the information bombarded
everyday
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on an individual. Processing the information and day to day updates altogether have created a complicated and diverse curriculum
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becomes quite intimidating, due to which we often see some
students
taking
breaks
in the educational journey to free
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mind or learn skills to take a leap. While taking
gaps
in education can benefit when seen through a larger picture, while there will be drawbacks as well, but mostly the
gaps
can overall improve a person’s well being mentally and physically and enhance
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connection
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with the real world. Most of the scholars today, take a year off from
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curriculum to gain
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practical industrial knowledge.
For instance
, many
students
take up internships,
part time
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jobs in companies so that they can be
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. Adding intern experiences in the resume can easily boost
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resume and show
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knowledge on specific sets of skills.
Furthermore
,
gaps
can help
students
to disconnect from the virtual world and explore different places around the globe. One study suggests that travelling can improve brain activity by activating certain chemicals that boost
the neurons growth
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in
brain
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and make the brain healthy. Overall, taking off from semesters aids scholars both physically and mentally.
On the contrary
,
breaks
are often seen as failures to some extent. Mostly, in some countries like India where I have seen employers treating
breaks
as failures and questioned the
students
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degree.
Moreover
, in
case
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of higher
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some universities do not intake newcomers with
gaps
in
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undergraduate or
bachelor’s
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.
Secondly
, it can break focus from the curriculum. As
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from
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personal experiences I have seen that if I take
breaks
for something even for a week I tend to forget about it as I lose connection
from
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it. Mostly as humans, it is one natural thing that happens
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.
Hence
, it can hamper the learning curve. To sum up,
breaks
can help
students
to gain more
industrial
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knowledge and relax
there
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mind through means of travelling, either
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they learn more about life and something new which can easily outweigh the disadvantages when seen from the long term perspective.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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