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Some students take a year off between school and university, to work or to travel. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#students #year #school #university #work #travel #outweigh
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The modern
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 technology has witnessed dramatic changes over the
last
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 few decades. Generally, it is becoming hard to cope up with the information bombarded
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 on an individual. Processing the information and day to day updates altogether have created a complicated and diverse curriculum
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 becomes quite intimidating, due to which we often see some
students
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 taking
breaks
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 in the educational journey to free
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 mind or learn skills to take a leap. While taking
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 in education can benefit when seen through a larger picture, while there will be drawbacks as well, but mostly the
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 can overall improve a person’s well being mentally and physically and enhance
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connection
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 with the real world. Most of the scholars today, take a year off from
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 curriculum to gain
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practical industrial knowledge.
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, many
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 take up internships,
part time
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 jobs in companies so that they can be
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. Adding intern experiences in the resume can easily boost
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 resume and show
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 knowledge on specific sets of skills.
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,
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 can help
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 to disconnect from the virtual world and explore different places around the globe. One study suggests that travelling can improve brain activity by activating certain chemicals that boost
the neurons growth
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the growth of the neuron
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 in
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 and make the brain healthy. Overall, taking off from semesters aids scholars both physically and mentally.
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,
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 are often seen as failures to some extent. Mostly, in some countries like India where I have seen employers treating
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 as failures and questioned the
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students
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 degree.
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, in
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 of higher
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 some universities do not intake newcomers with
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 in
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 undergraduate or
bachelor’s
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.
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, it can break focus from the curriculum. As
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personal experiences I have seen that if I take
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 for something even for a week I tend to forget about it as I lose connection
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 it. Mostly as humans, it is one natural thing that happens
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.
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, it can hamper the learning curve. To sum up,
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 can help
students
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 to gain more
industrial
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 knowledge and relax
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 mind through means of travelling, either
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 they learn more about life and something new which can easily outweigh the disadvantages when seen from the long term perspective.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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