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Some people say it is a waste of time when plan for the future .It is more important to focus on present. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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As can be seen, some people believe that we should focus on what we do now than our
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. I strongly agree that the present is more important than any
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 in our life.
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 of all, people who pay attention to the present are happier than those who do not. They said that we could not predict our
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.
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, it is a waste of
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 for us to keep thinking about it. We should concentrate on what to do now, and do the best we can to achieves our goal.
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, my sister is very stressed, while I am a lively person. My sister is not always happy with her life as she keeps planning for her
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 all the
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, which leads to mental illness and needs to meet
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psychology once a month.
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, I think that studying hard to complete the twelve grade from my school is enough for me. If I have high scores, I would be able to enrol in a good faculty.
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 thinking makes my life beautiful. The other point is that people who usually stay in the present would tend to become more successful than those who do not. Concerning too much about the
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 would not enable us to concentrate well on what we are doing right now.
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, nowadays, my best friend spends most of her
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 planning to study abroad. She kept searching more about universities in England until late at night every day. Having not enough
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 to sleep, she is always sleepy in
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class.
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, her grades dramatically falls
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 semester. In conclusion, it is very important for us to concentrate on what we are doing right now because it makes us become happier and more successful.
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, it is very waste of
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 for us to focus on the
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 as it can damage our mental and physical health.
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