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Band 8

Companies that use fossil fuels should be taxed more than companies that use green energies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that states should tax corporations burning fossil fuels more than those utilizing a greener source of energy.
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 essay completely agrees with
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 statement because it encourages the usage of a more renewable form and tackles climate change. Mandating higher taxes to institutions running on fossil fuels is going to eventually lead to an eco-friendly approach to running a business. As the duties go up, so do the cost and revenue decreases which in turn brings down profitability.
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 companies turn to more efficient ways of bringing down costs which ultimately leads them to adopt a greener approach.
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, the government of India has given tax exemptions up to 1.5 lakhs on interest to people purchasing an electric vehicle, and at the same time increased the GST rate for vehicles made for petrol and diesel.
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 has spiked the demand for electric vehicles and these companies are happy to manufacture it.
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 adoption
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 helps regulatory authorities tackle climate change. As and when organizations keep on using coal and natural gas for their operations, more toxic particles are released into the environment. These contribute a lot to global warming, which
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 melts glaciers in our north and south poles, resulting in rising sea levels.
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 becomes a continuous cycle and eventually leads to abnormal weather conditions.
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, to break
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 for good and heal the Earth, doing away with non-renewable resources is the key.
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, during the COVID-19 pandemic, the lockdown imposed by the nations resulted in a reduction in average daily temperature by certain degrees.
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 was possible because for almost a year the amount of coal burnt, required to power these infrastructures, was significantly less. In conclusion, the idea of taxing companies running on fossil fuels more than those working on a renewable energy source is good as they eventually lead to the adoption of greener forms which is sustainable in the long run.
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task achievement
Ensure all main points are consistently expanded with relevant details and examples.
coherence cohesion
While the essay is well-structured, you can consider having clearer transitions between paragraphs for enhanced flow.
task achievement
The essay fully addresses the prompt and provides a clear and comprehensive argument for higher taxes on companies using fossil fuels.
coherence cohesion
The structure is logical with an effective introduction and conclusion, making it easy to follow the argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay illustrates the main points with relevant examples, such as the tax exemptions in India for electric vehicles and the impact of the COVID-19 lockdown on the environment.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable
  • renewable resources
  • environmental degradation
  • carbon tax
  • incentivize
  • eco-friendly
  • greenhouse gases
  • sustainability
  • fossil fuels
  • alternative energy
  • emissions
  • environmental sustainability
  • subsidies
  • corporate responsibility
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