The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

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The World's population is increasing at
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a high rate each day. I agree with the statement that growth in the planet's population is the biggest challenge faced by humanity during the current time.
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growth is leading to various struggles for them
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as depleting essential
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at
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rate.
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, improper family planning is
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the biggest reason
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increase.
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, the planet has a limited amount of
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. If not used wisely , a shortage of these
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will occur in the future. The Rise in
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number of people is directly proportional to the rise in
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of these
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being exploited by them.
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they will be needing less water and electricity compared to they need when there are more members. Careful use is of the utmost importance.
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, improper family planning
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contributes as one of the causes in
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continuous rise. Each family on average is having more than 2
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children
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of having the quantity , people should focus on the quality. They should consider
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family income and plan
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. If there are more people
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the income should be more to
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fulfil
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needs.
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, if family income is not sufficient to satisfy the needs of
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one child
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and
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has three , in
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neither of the children will get the proper facilities like education. In conclusion, thoughtful use of
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, proper family planning , restricted number of
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children
in each family can help to resolve the above issues. At
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, in order to reduce the struggle of humanity ,
resources
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needs
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to be used thoughtfully and population growth.
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