IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

In some countries, owning a home rather renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is positive or negative situation?

#countries #home #people #be #case #situation
In recent years around the world, the rental price of Apartment's in major cities is reached above the sky.
Instead
 of spending a lot of money on
this
 payment
Add a comma
,
show examples
they are looking to purchase their own property. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss the reasons why I agree it's a positive sign before arriving at a conclusion.
Firstly
, The average rental price of a single bedroom Apartment in major cities like Toronto reaches around 1400
CAD
 per month. On top of
this
 Tenent's must and should opt for an insurance policy
which
Correct pronoun usage
that
show examples
 cost an additional 50
CAD
 per term. So, on ,average a micro family is supposed to spend around 1500
CAD
 per month to live in non owned house. On another hand, if anyone wants to buy an independent house in the countryside which is a well-connected transportation facility to the workplace in the major city they are supposed to pay an average
2200
Change preposition
of 2200
show examples
CAD
 per month with a minimum down payment.
This
 arrangement provides them vast living space with a backyard to grow organic vegetables for their daily needs. In conclusion, I strongly believe it's a positive sign to buy an individual house
instead
 of a rental Apartment. It will give you good returns at your retirement stage and
also
 it will create living space in rental apartments for the upcoming public to major cities.
Submitted by devireddyammaiah on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
What to do next:
Look at other essays: