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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online? Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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For the
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 of many
customers
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, mostly because of the restraint order during the pandemic and its convenience. To give people multi-
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 possesses and conclude with a personal opinion. Purchasing products via social media can bring plenty of advantages to both
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 and retailers.
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 of all, online shopping can reduce a considerable amount of time for individuals.
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, if a person decides to use the traditional way of shopping, they will go to the store, look for suitable products among the shelves, and purchase them,
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 it will take them a lot of effort and time in order to find the goods that meet their expectation.
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 is entirely opposite to online shopping, which is extremely easy to buy any product.
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, especially for retailers, they can cut down many expenses through
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social network.
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, despite the benefits that
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 brings, there are some disadvantages that people should be aware
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. The quality of the products is not guaranteed to satisfied the
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.
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,
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confidential protection is another factor that
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 should consider before deciding to
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 through
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social network. In conclusion, every
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 their own
exemplaries
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exemplars
 and
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inauspiciousness
, but I personally believe that the online shopping market will continue to grow in the future.
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