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Although many people value their public parks, this space could be used other purpose such as residential areas for over growing population or to develop business and boost economics. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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To buy their children everything they want parents to hustle day in and out
such
 as
toys
 when they are really small after that video games, clothes and soon.
This
 essay will discuss the benefits and the drawbacks for the child of owing too many fidgeting things. The advantages are
toys
 help in learning and keep them busy whereas wastage of money, made up of disposable
plastic
 are the disadvantages. The reason for the parents for providing a number of
toys
 to their children is to fasten their learning process and create some time for themselves. As there are
toys
 that can aid children to stand up and learn to walk, speak and write.
Moreover
, these
toys
 work to keep offsprings busier that time could be used by the guardians for household stuff or some alone time.
For instance
, it's been found in the survey that
toys
 play a very pivotal role in increasing the cognitive ability of a child. The imbalance in budget and usage of
plastic
 are the cons of buying a large number of playthings. As for caretakers to fulfil the demand of their offspring have to spend a big amount of money on playthings rather than putting that money in savings for the future and indeed
toys
 are mostly made up of
plastic
 which takes years to
dispose
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 and literally is the reason for soil pollution.
For instance
, in a study its been found that 60 per cent of land erosion is happening because of
plastic
. To conclude,
although
 having
the
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 large number of
toys
 have pros and can prove affecting in the initial growth of a child.
However
, bad effects can not be undermined as they can fate in the destruction of our environment.
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