Some people think that current environmental issues are global problems and should therefore be dealt with by the government. Others think that these problems can only be dealt with by individuals. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

It is considered by some
people
that present problems pertaining to the environment should be confronted by the government while others think these should be dealt
by
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people
themselves. I believe in my opinion, world
issues
should be dealt
at
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an individual level
such
as by the
people
in a country.
This
essay will discuss both sides of
this
argument and arrive at a conclusion. On one hand,
issues
such
as global warming should
addressed
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by governments by place certain restrictions because
this
will force
people
to change their behaviour for the greater good.
For instance
, increase the price of petrol will reduce the demand for
petrol driven
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cars. Thereby
people
demanding for more eco-friendly cars
such
as electric or
solar powered
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vehicles.
However
,
this
is not sufficient to put a stop to global
issues
since control must be enforced at an individual level as well.
People
must be able to
to
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think and act in a manner knowing their actions will leave a universal impact.
For example
, consumers must stop the consumption of plastic packaging since they take 100 plus years to degrade.
This
this
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will force companies to find alternative methods despite the high costs.
In addition
, parents should
also
teach their children to act sensible and make them understand the importance of sensible decision making that can impact on a global scale. In conclusion, is it evident that
although
governments could place certain restrictions to minimise global
issues
,
but
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this
only is not sufficient as individual
people
need to make smart
decision
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to minimise their global imprint as well as teach their younger generations
.
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