Many people believe that the increasing number of cars in cities is the biggest source of pollution and waste. Others think that industries are the ones causing pollution. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Pollution
is a major problem that many countries in the world have to deal with. This
issue is very hard to handle and takes ages to solve it
. Many Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
think that the rising number of cars
in cities is the biggest source of pollution
and waste. Meanwhile, others believe that industries
are the ones causing pollution
. I am totally
with both Replace the adverb
total
view
for many reasons that shall be discussed in the following paragraph.
Fix the agreement mistake
views
To begin
with, the reason why most people
think that cars
in cities are the main cause of pollution
and waste is because
Replace the word
that
it
release exhausted fumes to the Correct pronoun usage
they
environment
which lead to polluting the air and the Correct your spelling
greenhouse
green house
effect. And with the high living standard of Correct your spelling
greenhouse
people
nowadays, more and more cars
are being use
in daily life so the air is more polluted faster than ever. Change the verb form
are being used
are using
Moreover
, old cars
will be out of date or become old fashioned and people
will start to see it
as junk, throwing Correct pronoun usage
them
it
away. Correct pronoun usage
them
Therefore
a huge amount of plastic and metal waste will be release
Correct your spelling
released
to
the Change preposition
into
environment
, which is very hard to decompose.
Move on to the second
point of view, the reason why others believe that industries
are the main causing pollution
is very similar to those who think the main causing is cars
. Because most of the industries
uses
factories and emission is produced Change the verb form
use
everyday
from the manufactory process. The fume released is very harmful to the Replace the word
every day
environment
, especialy
the air. Correct your spelling
especially
Therefore
, makes us have the dissapointment
in humanity the same way Correct your spelling
disappointment
cars
did.
Taking everything into conclusion, it is obvious that both cars
and industries
have the same negative effect on the environment
and the
main cause of the Add a missing verb
are the
Correct your spelling
greenhouse
green house
effect. And we need to find a way to control it more in the futureCorrect your spelling
greenhouse
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite