Many people believe that the increasing number of cars in cities is the biggest source of pollution and waste. Others think that industries are the ones causing pollution. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Pollution
is a major problem that many countries in the world have to deal with.
This
issue is very hard to handle and takes ages to solve
it
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. Many
people
think that the rising number of
cars
in cities is the biggest source of
pollution
and waste. Meanwhile, others believe that
industries
are the ones causing
pollution
. I am
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with both
view
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for many reasons that shall be discussed in the following paragraph.
To begin
with, the reason why most
people
think that
cars
in cities are the main cause of
pollution
and waste is
because
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it
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they
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release exhausted fumes to the
environment
which lead to polluting the air and the
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greenhouse
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green house
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effect. And with the high living standard of
people
nowadays, more and more
cars
are being use
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in daily life so the air is more polluted faster than ever.
Moreover
, old
cars
will be out of date or become old fashioned and
people
will start to see
it
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as junk, throwing
it
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away.
Therefore
a huge amount of plastic and metal waste will be
release
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to
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the
environment
, which is very hard to decompose. Move on to the
second
point of view, the reason why others believe that
industries
are the main causing
pollution
is very similar to those who think the main causing is
cars
. Because most of the
industries
uses
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factories and emission is produced
everyday
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from the manufactory process. The fume released is very harmful to the
environment
,
especialy
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especially
the air.
Therefore
, makes us have the
dissapointment
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disappointment
in humanity the same way
cars
did. Taking everything into conclusion, it is obvious that both
cars
and
industries
have the same negative effect on the
environment
and
the
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main cause of the
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greenhouse
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green house
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effect. And we need to find a way to control it more in the future
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