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Even though doctors all over the world agree that fast food is bad for people's health, more and more people are eating it. Why are more people eating eating fast food? What can be done about this problem?

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Introduction
It is true that many
parents
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 purchase a multitude of playthings for their offspring. Whether or not
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 is a good thing for the
child
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, is a moot point. On the face of it the advantages seem most apparent, but could there be a downside to
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 phenomenon of devoted parenting as well?
Body paragraph 1
Most people would consider children who have many
toys
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 to be the fortunate ones. Interesting things to play with
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 many positives in the young boy or girl,
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 as optimum brain development, hand-eye coordination and colour recognition, apart from the simple joy of playing. Modern
toys
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 are designed to be educational as well as fun, and concerned
parents
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 carefully select products
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 might speed their
child
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's acquisition of numbers or the alphabet.
Body paragraph 2
Is it possible that owning multiple
toys
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 could be in any way detrimental to a
child
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?
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 is an unusual question, but there are some hidden pitfalls. For one, wealthy
parents
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 might spoil their son or daughter by showering him/her with
toys
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, resulting in a negative effect on the
child
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's character. For another, a growing
child
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's concentration span may suffer if they are constantly surrounded by too many tempting objects
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 so that they become unable to focus on any one game for a decent length of time before being distracted. On the social side, older children may become targets of envy from classmates, if they are perceived as having far more possessions than their peers.
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, the majority of
toys
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 today are made of plastic which commonly contains the chemical BPA, proven to be dangerous for infants to suck on or ingest.
Conclusion
It is clear,
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 that
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 situation is not as straightforward as it
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 appears. It would seem that one of the many duties of
parents
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 is to make an informed choice about how many
toys
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 they buy for their young ones.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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