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Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #managers #decisions #company #employees #process
Today's century is the century of struggle for equal rights. Some
managers
 who sit at the head of large companies use
this
 principle in order to give
to
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the employees
same
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the same
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 opportunities to decide the future of the corporation.
However
, others think that only top
managers
 should be involved in
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problem solving
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 process. Adhering to the principle of collective decision has its pros and cons. The
company
's board of directors and workers of
this
 corporation may consist of people with different opinions, thoughts and ideas that can improve the
company
.
Although
,
this
 advantage
also
 can be a disadvantage, because
this
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 opinions may be destructive and they may mislead
company
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the company
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 to the regress. Having only
managers
 on the top of the corporation have its
wn
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own
 pros and cons.
Firstly
, if the leaders of
this
 firm consist of reliable persons, they can lead the
company
 to a bright future with the help of their leadership abilities.
Secondly
, having a limited source of ideas may prevent
the
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inner conflicts in the firm.
However
, in the case of a
mistake
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 all responsibility will lay on shoulders of their own, so it can be a very stressful thing only for a few persons to carry on. Summing up all the facts that were said earlier, we can say that these two methods of leading a
company
has
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its
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their
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 own advantages and disadvantages. Personally, I believe that letting both
of
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managers
 and other regular employees
to
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participate is the best choice to control the
company
.
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