Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Today's century is the century of struggle for equal rights. Some
managers
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who sit at the head of large companies use
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principle in order to give
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the employees
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opportunities to decide the future of the corporation.
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, others think that only top
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should be involved in
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process. Adhering to the principle of collective decision has its pros and cons. The
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's board of directors and workers of
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corporation may consist of people with different opinions, thoughts and ideas that can improve the
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.
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,
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advantage
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can be a disadvantage, because
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opinions may be destructive and they may mislead
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company
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to the regress. Having only
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on the top of the corporation have its
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own
pros and cons.
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, if the leaders of
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firm consist of reliable persons, they can lead the
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to a bright future with the help of their leadership abilities.
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, having a limited source of ideas may prevent
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inner conflicts in the firm.
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, in the case of a
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all responsibility will lay on shoulders of their own, so it can be a very stressful thing only for a few persons to carry on. Summing up all the facts that were said earlier, we can say that these two methods of leading a
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its
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own advantages and disadvantages. Personally, I believe that letting both
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managers
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and other regular employees
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participate is the best choice to control the
company
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • top-down approach
  • hierarchical structure
  • grassroots level
  • strategic planning
  • on-the-ground experience
  • inclusive management
  • employee engagement
  • democratic process
  • transparency
  • cohesion
  • morale
  • practical insights
  • long-term goals
  • mutual respect
  • resistance to change
  • team dynamics
  • broader perspective
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