Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Nowadays, the majority of processed
foods
are those with extremely high levels of sugar, which can cause a broad list of health problems. Use synonyms
Thus
, some people argue that the best solution to that issue is to increase the cost of these Linking Words
foods
in an attempt to reduce their consumption.
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To begin
with, there is no doubt about the serious and dangerous impact of an increased dose of processed sugars on the human body. Linking Words
This
is because most diet-related diseases, Linking Words
such
as obesity, diabetes, and some types of cancers, are mainly caused by oversugared diets. But what exactly is the solution? Linking Words
While
the solution in question might mitigate the issue a bit, it’s not a proper way to tackle it. Linking Words
This
is mainly Linking Words
due to
the fact that most of these sugary Linking Words
foods
, Use synonyms
such
as bread, are often essential for daily survival; Linking Words
thus
, increasing their cost might lead to a lack of basic human need for food.
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On the other hand
, I suggest that the best approach towards less sugar intake is changing the notion of the consumers, especially the less literate. ones. Linking Words
For instance
, governments should organize “talks” that educate the civilians. about the dangers of these Linking Words
foods
and present them with cheap alternatives. Use synonyms
On the other hand
, obligating the citizens to consume less Linking Words
through
increasing the prices can be a limitation to the freedom of citizens and might even cause a contrasting reaction. Change preposition
by
That is
why associations should work on the inner desire of the person to change and switch to a sugar-free diet Linking Words
instead
of obligation.
In conclusion, despite the fact that sugar is the main source of most of today’s health problems, we should oblige change through economic strategies. Linking Words
Instead
, governments should aim for a more self-derived change.Linking Words
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task achievement
Ensure that you expand on your examples with more specific data or scenarios to strengthen your argument further. For instance, when discussing government actions, you might reference existing programs in certain countries.
coherence cohesion
Improve transitions between paragraphs to enhance the flow. Consider using linking phrases to clearly connect your ideas.
task achievement
You've clearly introduced an alternative solution to the problem and explained it with logical reasoning.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
You've identified and articulated a significant problem relating to sugar consumption and health.
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