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SOME PEOPLE SAY THAT ALL SECONDARY AND HIGH SECONDARY SCHOOL STUDENTS SHOULD BE TAUGHT HOW TO MANAGE MONEY AS IT IS AN IMPORTANT LIFE SKILL. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE

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In today's world,
money
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 has a great role to play when talking about
one
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's future and present. It is ,
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, important to educate the children during their adolescence, how to manage it.
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 essay will talk about how through a cautious understanding of monetary management,
one
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 can learn to lead both secure and satisfying life, as well as
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 gratitude-filled
one
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. It is important for a person to learn the three basic principles of
money
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 channelisation which are "spend", "save" and "share". If a child is inculcated with these values of bifurcation, it'll make their future easier and
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, induce the feeling of cautious spending. They'll realise the importance of
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 and
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, it might lead to better self-control when it comes to splurging on the things they want rather than the ones they need thereby, reducing the greed for more and more things.
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, the sharing part is an inevitable aspect when talking about life skills.
One
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 must be considerate enough to the basic concept of not being selfish and greedy as it is important for a youngster to understand his/her moral obligation towards society and to help
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 another.
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 can be taught at an earlier age by teaching them to share the
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 they have with the poor.
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,
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 habit will help them understand the value of
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 and will keep them from overspending. Conclusively, teaching financial management from a young age is important as it ultimately helps them in planning the financial aspect of their lives and helps them to lead a more sincere and gratitude-filled life as adults.
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