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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Every
country
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 should have a free
health
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service
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 even if
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 means that the recent medical
equipment
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 may not be available through
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service
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. To provide a non-payment
health
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service
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 to the
citizens
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 by the
government
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 can be very expensive and cost a lot for the
government
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. I am of the opinion that it should be paid for.
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, it could be subsidized by the
government
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, so as to accommodate all range of people in the
country
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, from the low-income earners to the very high-income earners.
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,
health
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 stability is very important and should not be ignored by
citizens
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.
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, if the
citizens
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 are not charged any
amount
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 at all for the
service
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 provided by the doctors, it will not be valued.
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, a doctor fixes an appointment for a patient, but because the
service
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 is not been paid for, it can be treated with negligence compared to if a particular
amount
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 was paid for the
service
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.
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, every medical
equipment
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 needs to be maintained for a long life span,
also
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 the drugs and treatment have to be purchased when they finish, all thises cost a particular
amount
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.
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 a non-payment
health
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service
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 cannot be sustainable for a
country
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. When a subsidized
amount
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 is paid for the
health
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service
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,
this
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 fee can be sued to maintain the
equipment
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.
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, paying a reduced fee for the
health
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 aid will encourage the citizen to visit the hospital often without an excuse of having to be charged the high cost for the
service
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.
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, when a subsidized
amount
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 is paid for the well-being
service
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 provided,
this
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 will help the
government
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 to provide adequate
health
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 care facilities for
citizens
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 in need,
also
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 been able to maintain the facilities. On
this
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 note, the recent medical treatment and
equipment
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 purchased
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 can be used but at a subsidized
amount
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 and the
health
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 maintenance organization (HMO) plan can help provide a wide range of
health
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 care services in the
country
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.
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