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With the development of online communication, people will never be alone and will always be able to make new friends? To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is certainly a fact that the use of the internet is flourishing all over the globe which has made things more convenient for
people
 to build relations online.
Therefore
, a fair amount of
people
 believe by interacting online,
one
 can never be insane. I do not completely accord with
this
, as meeting face to face is more affectionate as compare to online communication. To commence with, there are multiple reasons that why
people
 prefer to get in touch physically.
Firstly
, If someone is facing difficulty in
life
 they can discuss
the
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things by sitting together as meeting, in reality, is quite
relaxful
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relax
.
Secondly
, individuals are very busy in their lives and hardly get the time to talk with others. Which leads to a stressful
life
. So, they are always desperately waiting for friends or relatives to meet ardently.
Furthermore
, sharing personal
life
 with your mate or friend is important which helps
people
 not to get into depression.
For example
,
one
 needs to talk about personal trouble they are facing in their
life
, with someone in
this
 way they can lead to a balanced and healthy
life
.
However
, communicating online has made it very easier way to talk with others remotely in merely a few seconds.
One
 can make a lot of friends online.
Besides
, it is an inevitable fact that those relations are temporary and
one
 can not be omniscient in using tools that are not so user friendly. Needless to say that interacting online will be having no place in
this
 ever-advanced modern world. To conclude, the lives of
people
 are drastically affected by finding friends online, in my opinion, it will not be able to pose threat to physically meeting way of interaction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • geographical gaps
  • interact
  • social media platforms
  • messaging apps
  • revolutionized
  • physical distance
  • online communities
  • camaraderie
  • immediate surroundings
  • unparalleled opportunities
  • superficial relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • emotional warmth
  • tactile comfort
  • digital communication
  • digital divide
  • internet censorship
  • global connectivity
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