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Write a letter to the editor to give your opinion about a magazine that you purchased. Include: Why you bought it What you liked and disliked about it Suggestions for improvement

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Dear Editor, I am a new reader of your magazine. Recently I bought the Daily Economy for everyone 4th edition, and I am writing to give you my sincere feedback about it. I decided to purchase your magazine for two main reasons,
first
 because of the interview with Gustavo Cerbasi,
who
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 I admire a lot, and
second
 because I am really interested in learning about bitcoins. I am not disappointed about the explanation of bitcoins, Gustavo Cerbasi is definitely an excellent teacher and I
finally
 could understand and invest money in it.
However
, the print quality of your magazine is terrible, my fingers got dirty and it irritated me a lot. Given the situation, I would like to make two suggestions for you, the
first
 is to enhance the quality of the print and the
second
 is to publish more content about personal finance which would include real cases, people who follow the advice and have succeeded. I hope you will consider my option before your
next
 publication. Thank you in advance Yours faithfully, Raquel Prudente.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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