urban areas nowadays are witnessing obesity among children. What are the causes and solution of this problem acoording to you? Ang suggest some solutions.
In today's world, youngsters are suffering from health issues
such
as fatness. The weight gain problems by
children Change preposition
of
is
continuously increasing due to poor eating habits. Change the verb form
are
As
Change preposition
This
this
issue can be tackled by some appropriate measures, that will be discussed by me in upcoming paragraphs.
As the parents are busy and kids
are unaware about
the issues and Change preposition
of
Correct your spelling
effects
affects
of improper eating routine, obesity Correct your spelling
effects
realted
problems can be anticipated. The unhealthy western junk Correct your spelling
related
food
is more preferable by
young ones rather than traditional healthy meals because of having a delicious taste. Due to Change preposition
to
hectic
Correct article usage
a hectic
schedule
, parents prefer to order Fix the agreement mistake
schedules
food
from restaurants which
Correct pronoun usage
that
is
cooked with the usage of Change the verb form
are
bunch
of spices and oils. Most of the ingredients are high in kilocalorie that Add an article
a bunch
are
used by restaurants to make Change the verb form
is
food
savory
and unhealthy. Change the spelling
savoury
For example
, one small pizza consists more
than 1500 calories, and having more than 1500 calorie meal at one time is Change preposition
of more
Correct article usage
a straight
straight forward
cause of gain weight by children in Correct your spelling
straightforward
early
years of life. Correct article usage
the early
Therefore
, high calorie
consumption Add a hyphen
high-calorie
slow
down the digestion process and convert calories into fat during digestion.
There are several actions that can be taken to overcome the problem described above. The simple solution would Change the verb form
slows
be encourage
Change the verb form
be to encourage
kids
to eat healthy tradition
meals. Parents should Replace the word
traditional
aware
their progenies about the impacts of junk Add a missing verb
be aware
food
. They are supposed to spend some time to cook
healthy Change the verb form
cooking
food
and motivate their offsprings
to have it. As the traditional Fix the agreement mistake
offspring
food
is heavy
meal and make childrens' tummy full for Add an article
a heavy
long
time and, that will help to avoid junk Change the article
a long
food
and overeating. Moreover
, I will recommend some changes in food
presentation method that will be helpful to attract young ones to consume it. Correct article usage
the food
For instance
, we can serve rice in the shape of star
and, chop salad in different shapes to allure Add an article
a star
kids
. Consequenlty
, encouragement by presentation and awareness will come up with good results to keep children far away from unhealthy Correct your spelling
Consequently
food
and adaptation
Replace the word
adapt
of
good eating habits.
To conclude, Change preposition
to
eventhough
the number of fatty Correct your spelling
even though
kids
raising itself, this
issue can be solved by encouragement and awareness.Submitted by gwarring1997 on
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