urban areas nowadays are witnessing obesity among children. What are the causes and solution of this problem acoording to you? Ang suggest some solutions.

In today's world, youngsters are suffering from health issues
such
as fatness. The weight gain problems
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children
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continuously increasing due to poor eating habits.
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this
issue can be tackled by some appropriate measures, that will be discussed by me in upcoming paragraphs. As the parents are busy and
kids
are unaware
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the issues and
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affects
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of improper eating routine, obesity
realted
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related
problems can be anticipated. The unhealthy western junk
food
is more preferable
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young ones rather than traditional healthy meals because of having a delicious taste. Due to
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schedule
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, parents prefer to order
food
from restaurants
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is
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cooked with the usage of
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of spices and oils. Most of the ingredients are high in kilocalorie that
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used by restaurants to make
food
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and unhealthy.
For example
, one small pizza consists
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than 1500 calories, and having more than 1500 calorie meal at one time is
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cause of gain weight by children in
early
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years of life.
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,
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consumption
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down the digestion process and convert calories into fat during digestion. There are several actions that can be taken to overcome the problem described above. The simple solution would
be encourage
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kids
to eat healthy
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meals. Parents should
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their progenies about the impacts of junk
food
. They are supposed to spend some time
to cook
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healthy
food
and motivate their
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to have it. As the traditional
food
is
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meal and make childrens' tummy full for
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time and, that will help to avoid junk
food
and overeating.
Moreover
, I will recommend some changes in
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presentation method that will be helpful to attract young ones to consume it.
For instance
, we can serve rice in the shape of
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and, chop salad in different shapes to allure
kids
.
Consequenlty
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Consequently
, encouragement by presentation and awareness will come up with good results to keep children far away from unhealthy
food
and
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good eating habits. To conclude,
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even though
the number of fatty
kids
raising itself,
this
issue can be solved by encouragement and awareness.
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