There are many wild birds and animals living in the cities, and some people believe that these animals should be killed, while others think that they should be saved and protected. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#birds #animals #cities #people

A highly controversial issue today relates to whether to treat sewage birds and

animals

or not. In

this

essay, I am going to examine

this

question from both points of view and

then

explain why I believe the arguments for caring for those

animals

are stronger. There are people who argue that the benefits of killing those

animals

considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing

this

is those wild

animals

represent a big chance of getting affected

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apply

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them

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apply

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by viruses or diseases. It is

also

possible to say that they can hurt humans when they felt insecure, which will increase

fearness

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fairness

fearless

in people when they were outside their houses. To illustrate, in some places of California where Alligators move around some residential streets causing fear in many individuals.

On the other hand

, others believe that there are just

animals

without protection looking for safer habitats. It is often argued that they do not hurt people if anyone

threaten

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them. A

second

point is that humans should be involved in the role of caring and

nutrishing

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nourishing

those

animals

in order to avoid them

to be

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being

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extinguished due to the lack of help.

For example

, Panda’s Bear did not have the

appropiate

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appropriate

habitat to have their babies and as a

consequence

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the number of Pandas has decreased after some years. In conclusion, I believe both arguments have their merits. On balance,

however

, I feel that the better option is treating and moving those

animals

to places where they could survive with

securance

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secure

such

as a zoo.

This

is because they will receive treatment from qualified workers and receive attention from the visitors during most part of the year.

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