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Some people believe that traveling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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people
 think that travelling is a crucial experience while others argue that it is a drastic loss of time and money.
This
 essay will discuss these both arguments. Primarily, it is often said that travelling is a time-consuming and costly type of entertainment. Living in another country and travelling to different cities of that territory is expensive.
Moreover
, it is time-consuming for
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overseas
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For instance
, it will take at least two weeks to go for a short journey to Italy from Kazakhstan, which is really inconvenient for students and working
people
.
However
, in many aspects, it is undeniable that tourists gain a lot of experience by travelling. Experience
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 a crucial role in anyone's life. Acquaintance with a new culture, customs and language would broaden their mind. It can even make them more tolerant of differences.
Hence
, when they need to cooperate with other
people
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, they are more likely to easily overcome their differences.
In addition
, visitors may meet
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 of
people
 and make friends.
This
also
 will improve their foreign language and communication skills. I believe that tourists are acquiring more benefits from
such
 involvement. In conclusion, while foreign travel requires a lot of time and money, the benefits gained from these trips are worth the time and money.
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