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Many people try to find a balance between their work and other aspects of their life. However, few actually achieve this. What solutions can you suggest?

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People
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 today are increasingly concerned with individual happiness and
work
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-life
balance
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. The main problem for most
people
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 is that
work
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 takes up too much
time
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 and causes mental health issues and the best way to achieve
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balance
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 is to
work
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 more efficiently. The primary issues associated with
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-life
balance
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 are the amount of
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people
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 must spend working and how
this
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 impacts their mental health. Since the global financial crisis of 2008, the job market around the world has become increasingly competitive.
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 means that old workers may get pushed out of their jobs by younger graduates willing to
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 for less and that new graduates have to put in enormous extra hours to catch up. The end result is more
work
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, which eats away at a person’s private life. Once your free
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 becomes restricted there are a variety of related mental health problems that can appear.
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, someone who is overworked can suffer from excessive stress, some forms of depression, and obesity because of the lack of
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 available to exercise.
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 why there has been a sharp rise in the
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 decade in these problems. The best way for
people
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 to combat being overworked and get more
time
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 for their personal life is to
work
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 more efficiently. In an ideal world, there would be ways to alleviate the burden that put less stress on individuals but making the most of your
time
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 is a more pragmatic solution.
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, smartphones allow
people
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 to get a lot of
work
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 done in what
were
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 previously wasted hours in the past. You can send emails, make phone calls, and use productivity applications when waiting for the bus, train, or standing in line.
People
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 will have to make the choice not to scroll through Facebook or read the news but
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 a small sacrifice to have some extra
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 at the end of the day to do their hobbies or spend
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 with a loved one. In conclusion, the problems associated with poor
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-life
balance
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 are especially apparent because of the current economic climate and the best solution is to find ways to maximise efficiency. If more
people
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 changed their daily habits related to social media and using the internet,
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 they might be able to find more worthwhile passions and not feel as though their life is passing them by.

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