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More and more young people use the Internet to socialise. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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People
 are having a hard
time
 reaching a consensus on whether using the Internet to socialise is a positive or a negative trend amongst young
people
. To my mind, socialising online is a negative development. There is no doubt that social networking
websites
 have caused more problems than merits. For one thing, cyberbullying poses a real threat to the well-being of young
people
. As a matter of fact, cyberbullying happens on a daily basis on most social networking
websites
,
such
 as Facebook and Twitter, which has led to the increasing suicide rate among youngsters. For another, socialising online gives young
people
 fewer chances to practise their interpersonal skills, especially face-to-face communication skills. Undeniably, nowadays more and more young
people
 prefer texting each other on Facebook as opposed to speaking to each other in person.
Besides
, too many youngsters spend too much
time
 on social networking
websites
, which wastes their precious
time
 that should be spent studying. More precisely, most teenagers spend more
time
 chatting with others online rather than do their homework at home. To be sure, social networking
websites
also
 provides young
people
 with the convenience of contacting friends that are far away.
This
 is reasonable to the extent that some friends may live in other cities, so it is not easy to see them often. Still, sending emails to friends would be a more beneficial option because emails are less
time
-consuming.
Thus
 social networking
websites
 are not helpful in most cases. In the final analysis, despite the fact that socialising online is a popular new trend, it does not help young
people
 when it comes to communication,
time
 management and mental health. For
this
 reason, I am convinced that socialising online is a negative development in general.
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