Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify three serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

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population
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of cities rapidly increased
from
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over
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last
decades. The cause of overcrowding is migration from
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to
advance
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regions. The high
traffic
jams, unemployment and
pollution
problems can be anticipated and, some steps can be taken by people and government to overcome
this
issue that will be discussed in
this
essay.
To begin
with the complications of overcrowded urban
areas
,
Firstly
, the
traffic
jams in developed towns is
a
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main topic. Due to the comfort and time saving, the personal cars are preferred by most of the human beings and it comes up with the result of accident increment.
Secondly
, the incline in unemployment can be seen in advanced cities . As the job vacancies are limited, some
of
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individuals
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the individuals
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are not able to get
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a job
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job
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jobs
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due to high competition levels caused by population rise.
Hence
, It leads towards poverty because of
less
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number
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fewer
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of jobs.
Finally
,
pollution
is
a
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another big issue of crowding which is caused by
an
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expensive and, less
degradeable
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degradable
facilities. As humans can not afford them, and they throw garbage in open
areas
and on roads, which leads toward the foil smells and disease
spreadation
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predation
preparation
.
Thus
,
pollution
gives negative impacts on
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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and make persons sick. There are several actions
can
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that can
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be taken to solve these issues described above.
First
of all, the simple solution would be to encourage people to use public transport and
aware
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them
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for
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the negative effects of road
traffic
.
Moreover
,
government
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the government
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should imply taxes according to the mileage of vehicles. So, the use of private vehicles will be avoided by inhabitants.
Additionaly
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Additionally
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,
government
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the government
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should develop the rural
areas
and provide jobs that will be helpful to decrease the migration from
rural
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a rural
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area
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areas
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to cities.
Lastly
, the fines should be implemented for individuals who trash their
grabage
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garbage
on roads and open
areas
.
Furthermore
, they should be
awared
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aware
awarded
about
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of
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the side effects of
pollution
to put some efforts to decline the
pollution
rate. To conclude,
although
,
traffic
jams and
pollution
are the issues of overcrowding, encouragement, awareness and some laws will be helpful to reduce the number of problems.
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