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Public transport is essential bu problematic. Describe some of the problems connected to public transport and suggest solution.

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All over the world from North America to China and from South Africa to Australia one thing one can find
common
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 is public
transport
 ,which may be in the form of buses ,trains ,metros or any other means but you will find it everywhere as it is one of the basic need of society,
however
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 it is always not comfortable, depending on the locality it has its deficits. In
this
 , essay I am going to discuss issues with public
transport
 and some remedies for the same. We can't imagine any place without public
transport
 as it is convenient,cheap and accessible for everyone,though it got some trouble with it like
frequency
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 of routes ,not available at every place,at some places it gets too
much
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congested ,with limited choices for comfort. most striking of public
transport
 is over-crowding during peak hours like in the morning and evening when everyone trying to go
their
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to their
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 job or home at the same time and
for
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to overcome
this
 I would like to suggest that local governments or municipalities should arrange different
timing
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times
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 for every type of business like school start at 7am ,production units open at 8 am ,municipal offices at 9am and so on,followed with
such
 planning for dismissal of the day. The frequency of public
transport
 is another trouble that comes to mind and it can be solved by sharing some roots with the private sector where the government can not reach out or planning shuttle
services
.
At
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 some places smoking
in
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on
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 public
transport
 is
also
 a great discomfort as some individuals don't follow
them
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any smoking policy at common travel
services
, so would
like to
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put high fines and imprisonment rules for offenders. Public
services
 should include some VIP routes with more comfortable and updated buses with higher fares ,on the other ,hand travel during night times is very hard as at places no public
transport
 at all or no sleeper coach
services
,for the betterment of citizens government should look on
this
 field or mandate private
services
 on non -profit base. In , conclusion I can say there
is
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 a number of issues with public
transport
 but they're no match to compare with
coverage
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the coverage
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 and
services
 provided to a vast number of passengers no other means comes in comparison.
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task response
The essay provides a general overview of public transport issues and solutions but lacks depth and clarity. It needs to address the task prompt more directly and provide more specific examples and solutions.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear and cohesive structure, making it difficult to follow. The introduction and conclusion are present, but the logical flow and coherence of the essay could be improved.
lexical resource
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some expressions are imprecise and the language lacks sophistication. More precise and advanced vocabulary could enhance the essay's overall quality.
grammatical range
The essay demonstrates a basic command of grammar, but there are a number of errors and awkward phrases that affect coherence. Revising for grammar and sentence structure would greatly improve the essay.

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