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Fast food is now universally in most countries and is becoming increasingly popular. Some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not. What are your opinion in this?

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In recent years, the popularity of fast
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 has been significantly higher in the world. Debates on whether
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 is a good or lousy tendency has been a controversial topic.
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, I firmly believe that the drawbacks of fast
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 outweigh its benefits. It is an undeniable fact that the presence of junk
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 has dramatically benefited people in some ways.
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, fast
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 is considerably time-saving and convenient. Commonly, nowadays we can easily find fast
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 stores in almost everywhere of big cities.
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, workers and students could save considerable time when they have junk meals
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 of cooking by themselves at home.
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, eating fast
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 is much cheaper than traditional
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 to help people set their money back.
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, fast
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 contain a high proportion of unhealthy ingredients
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 as unsaturated fats, oil, sugar and salt. Frequent consumption of these will cause obesity and health problems, including fatty liver, high blood pressure and high cholesterol levels.
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, fast
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 have shallow nutritional value and do not fulfil the requirements of a moderate diet.
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, constant intake of fast
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 may cause a nutritional deficiency in the long term.
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, according to a recent survey, the rate of obesity has drastically boosted in America due to overeating fast
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 of the locals. Another reason is that more and more people are interested in western
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 that has threatened traditional cuisine. Modern families prefer eating junk snacks over conventional meals in their daily meals. In conclusion, I strongly argue that despite benefiting the community in the short term, fast
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’s long-term effects are generally adverse.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Obesity epidemic
  • Processed foods
  • Nutritional value
  • Chronic diseases
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Economic impact
  • Job creation
  • Environmental degradation
  • Sustainability
  • Dietary habits
  • Consumerism
  • Mass production
  • Public health
  • Health-conscious
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